In this evaluation, I am goint to comment on Veysel's free reflection about beauty concept in his blog. I have chosen this because I really appreciate his thoughts and what I think about this concept is nearly the same as the Veysel's. In his reflection, he wrote about the media's effect on how the beauty is conceived by the Turkish parents. Media really affects the thoughts of Turkish families' about the beauty. They always show physically beautiful people on TV, on advertisements and on the Internet. That's why, they think that beauty is just connected with physical apperance.
The content of his reflection is really good. He clearly wrote the ideas he is supporting and what media emposes to the community. His reflection is easy to understand. Just like Semih, Veysel has also written one solid paragraph in his reflection. I think this contruction is making it harder for readers to identify different ideas. It would be better if he divided this one into two or three paragraphs.
To talk about organization, all the ideas presented in his reflection are coherent in between. They are all parallel with the main idea. He perfectly transferred the ideas in his mind to the reflection he wrote. I really enjoyed his writing. Sentences that he used are well organized and I did not see any grammatical mistakes in them. He used correct conjuctors in correct places.
To sum up, Veysel's paragraph has a very good content, it is well-organized and it just has small grammar mistakes. I really enjoyed while reading it. My question for Veysel is that he briefly described what is not beauty for him. I want to know what is beauty for Veysel.
to Veysel Akka http://veyselakka.blogspot.com.tr/2016/01/free-task_25.html
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